You don't need to cry, "the sky is falling!" or terrorize your reader into making a gift. Instead, write to create a world that pulls donors in and makes them care about what is actually going on.
With the probable exception of climate change, most of the causes we fight for won't literally bring about the end of the world if we don't win. It often feels that way. But the truth is, if we fail to legalize recreational pot smoking, millions of innocent refugees won't be driven from their homes and left to starve.
The "size" of the cause shouldn't affect the power of the writing. Hysterical hyperbole is like underlining in a letter. If we yell about everything, we end up yelling about nothing. Likewise, if we claim that the world hangs in the balance of every urgent issue, donors and prospects begin to think that nothing will really be the end of the world.
Words skillfully used can change the world by changing one mind. For the sake of our long-term relationships, let us all affirm the power of language and agree that every sentence does not have to be set on fire to inspire a reader to give.
Let us tone down the rhetoric and crank up the emotion with our writing skills, not doomsday prophesies. Donors will be grateful and reward our organizations accordingly.
Write real. You have nothing to lose but your declining donor engagement.
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Willis Turner believes great writing has the power to change minds, save lives, and make people want to dance and sing. Willis is the creative director at Huntsinger & Jeffer. He worked as a lead writer and creative director in the traditional advertising world for more than 15 years before making the switch to fundraising 20 years ago. In his work with nonprofit organizations and associations, he has written thousands of appeals, renewals and acquisition communications for every medium. He creates direct-response campaigns, and collateral communications materials that get attention, tell powerful stories and persuade people to take action or make a donation.